This game needs work, while the story does seem interesting the writing and poor grammar make it too hard to follow and I often find myself not understanding the dialogue as well as feeling as if things are moving too fast. I'm in no way saying that this game is bad, just that it needs to be refined. I would also highly suggest not using "tho" and "boi" in your writing as it makes you seem unprofessional and lazy. Lastly I would suggest adding transitions between pictures to make the story flow more smoothly. Overall the story does seem interesting and I do plan on playing ep. 2 when it comes out and I dearly hope you don't take offence to any of my critiques as I'm just trying to provide constructive criticism.
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The comment area seems to have not interacted for a year. Is the author still updating this game? When will the next update come out?
It looks interesting. Can you tell me what tags are you going to put in your game?
This game needs work, while the story does seem interesting the writing and poor grammar make it too hard to follow and I often find myself not understanding the dialogue as well as feeling as if things are moving too fast. I'm in no way saying that this game is bad, just that it needs to be refined. I would also highly suggest not using "tho" and "boi" in your writing as it makes you seem unprofessional and lazy. Lastly I would suggest adding transitions between pictures to make the story flow more smoothly. Overall the story does seem interesting and I do plan on playing ep. 2 when it comes out and I dearly hope you don't take offence to any of my critiques as I'm just trying to provide constructive criticism.
All criticism are welcome.
Not really that great for now since this is my first time doing this ^^.. I'll improve along the way
Cant wait for next update
Working on it ^^ should be out soon
I wish you a speedy recovery, and I love playing your game and support your game. 🙂
Thank you so much <3
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Flagged?
Yes when trying to download the game it says the page has been flagged. Dont remember what for though so I didnt trust it enough to download the game.
Edit: It no longer says it is flagged
Double Edit: this is what it says "Our system has flagged this page for additional review due to potential suspicious behavior from the page owner."
Probably because of the part that our main page was hacked but thank you for the info ^^
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